Lighten up, Candice. I welcome any and all comments.
And I welcome any excuse to send along the H.G. Wells
quotation.
Hal
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On Apr 9, 2007, at 9:26 AM, MC Ward wrote:
> When you post a poem here, the implicit assumption is
> that you want comments on it. This kind of mannerless
> response discourages feedback, so I, for one, won't
> asume that you want any comments (or praise only) on
> your posted poems. That makes even reading them a
> waste of time, as is your time in posting them.
>
> Candice
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> --- Halvard Johnson <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> I second that notion.
>>
>> Hal
>>
>> "No passion in the world is equal to
>> the passion to alter someone else's draft."
>> --H. G. Wells
>>
>> Halvard Johnson
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>> On Apr 9, 2007, at 1:48 AM, Patrick Mc Manus wrote:
>>
>>> Roger These people who are cursed with wanting to
>> rewrite other
>>> peoples
>>> snaps!!!!!! Ban them that's what I say :-)
>>> Patrick de raynes park
>>>
>>> -----Original Message-----
>>> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics
>>> [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
>>> Behalf Of Roger Day
>>> Sent: 08 April 2007 17:37
>>> To: [log in to unmask]
>>> Subject: Re: snapshot -- revision
>>>
>>> how about this?
>>>
>>> Stepping into the morning
>>> waxwing symphonies and crow concertos
>>> air shivering, air trembling
>>> sandman cacophony crowding out the daylight
>>> ... why do we enter the future
>>> with the past in our deep night pockets
>>>
>>> although you may not want to go that far ...
>>>
>>> On 4/6/07, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]>
>> wrote:
>>>> thank you all for your critiques on this piece.
>> here is a
>>>> revision, which
>>> i
>>>> think is an improvement. i agree with andrew that
>> it would be good
>>>> to take
>>>> the "I" from the first line, but can't see a way
>> just yet:
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> I stepped from my house this morning,
>>>> head crowded with voices from dreams,
>>>> into shivering air, trembling air, symphonies
>>>> of waxwings and robins, a percussion
>>>> of crows ... Why do we enter the future
>>>> with the past in our night pockets? Trees
>>>> shook with squirrel passions; goldfish
>>>> drifted from the pond's dark bottom
>>>> into pale water. At dusk the mountains
>>>> were scarved with mist.
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> On 4/4/07, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]>
>> wrote:
>>>>>
>>>>> I stepped from my house this morning,
>>>>> head crowded with voices from dreams,
>>>>> into shivering air, trembling air, symphonies
>>>>> of waxwings and robins, a percussion
>>>>> of crows ... Why do we enter the future
>>>>> with the past in our night pockets? Trees
>>>>> shook with squirrel passions; goldfish
>>>>> drifted from the pond's dark bottom
>>>>> up into pale water, reacquainting themselves
>>>>> with the surface. The day passed slowly.
>>>>> At dusk the mountains were scarved with mist.
>>>>>
>>>>> <http://www.sbpoet.com>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> --
>>>> ~ SB =^..^=
>>>>
>>>> http://www.sbpoet.com
>>>>
>>>
>>>
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>>> "Patriotism is a virtue of the vicious." Oscar
>> Wilde
>>
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