'thru' but 'colour'?
riot/quiet & verve/nerve (lines) are very good.
the poem is terribly formal, it sounds unimpressive & taskless.
KS
On 09/02/07, King, Darren <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Apologies, I don't know why it looks fine when I click send but when it
> arrives, the lines are all mixed up. I guess in Outlook, what you see
> it not what you get. I tested this with another mail account so it
> should be ok.
>
>
> By sevens they fall, the words of the kings
> There Chaucer thru Troilus brang forth royal rime
> Before me, the poet, the one whose soul sings
> All manner of song, to pass beyond time.
> Scenes then of war and love and of crime.
> What then, is in me as words gather a riot?
> Pallette of my blood, to colour the quiet.
>
> The shaper of all that rise above the daily;
> The being and seeing, all that do pass.
> In what do I hold that laugh - so gaily?
> A place no one sees, where no one will ask.
> That something else beyond caste or class.
> That I may call, when down, upon it's verve
> It do touch my senses and spur on my nerve.
>
> Darren
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