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From: "David Howard" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Wednesday, February 14, 2007 7:10 PM
Subject: Snap 'Valentine's Day'
VALENTINE’S DAY
The joy in feeling
tired. Take your lady friend
out and that. We go
to the pub, the night
trots, laugh and carry on.
You get covered in blood but
you get used to it. They kick
for four or five seconds then
konk, gone. It’s good work
and handy to home.
I like this a lot. Bone-dry, convincing demotic voice. The scary ambiguity
of "gone." You might drop the "you" in line 7.
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