kasper salonen wrote:
> ah youth.
> good stuff, 1st st esp
>
> KS
Odd, because I am not much on it right now. I suppose I wrote it as an
antidote to Valentine's Day. Very promising in that the "usual" roles
were reversed with the speaker a sentimental male and the woman more
interested in "going for it"; and that the twists of the language in
that first stanza were fun to do even if they got a bit excessive. I
suppose in any rewrite the entire Browning-Barrett business has to go.
If I'm still thinking about the poem after a few days I may have at it
again. Cold-bloodedly:-).
KW
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"For the thing which I greatly feared is come upon me, and that which I
was afraid of is come unto me. I was not in safety, neither had I
rest, neither was I quiet; yet trouble came."
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