I like it too. Very strong imagery and different to the norm.
I'm inclined to agree with Andrew's suggestions.
Shouldn't it be "condensed" rather than "condensated"?
Janet
> I like it, Roger. How about taking out 'Had I listened to the
> dark-side?' and 'I confess', both of which seem to me to take us out
> of the misty mood.
>
> I love
>
> > inspiration condensating
> > in sparkles on her shoulder
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