Thanks for wading, Max.
>Deborah,
>
>I have waded in and set out your exact (rather lovely) words with lots of
>line
>breaks and white space. Less 'modest', but something like this suits my eye
>and
>ear better than your rather crammed, 'bustled'?, layout...
>
>best from Max
>
>Quoting deborah russell <[log in to unmask]>:
>
> The Moon Is a Jade
>
>This sky is full of starlight
>against the deep, dark black.
>
>Lightly, the way sleep gleams
>the eyes on winter nights,
>
>his hair, unleashed, brushes
>my face … though it doesn't matter
>
>as I pass from one dream to the next,
>thoughts unwinding flexible threads.
>
>Frayed …the moon is a jade,
>pages pressed with feathers,
>
>poems of fading light and love's
>restless disease. You'd think, by now,
>
>I'd have memorized the path where
>pine needles lay down their pungent scent,
>
>where sunlight kisses eyes and weaves
>fragmented seams in light weight wraps …
>
>I wake in a combination of sun
>and shadow; knowing he was no more than
>
>an inspiration for a poem -
>yet in this slight breeze,
>I feel the definition of his laugh.
>
> Deborah Russell, © 2007
>
>
>
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