Elegiac, as if Gray had written his first verse yesterday. Lovely.
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Sent: Wednesday, 10 January 2007 12:40 PM
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Subject: Re: Poem: Surely, Surely
At first I enjoy this, its repetition of 'surely' underscoring the
deliberate,
peaceful mood. With the woodsmoke and the sky's vault, it feels like
we're
out in the country. But then it starts talking about the cars, which
seem
to me not to be stampeding like a bunch of 'lowing' cows but going very
slowly, 'inching' past each other, as in a jammed-up city centre.
At this point I feel the mood is spoilt.
Perhaps that's how it's supposed to be.
Janet
> SURELY, SURELY
>
> wood-smoke in night-
> air, steam of your
...
> the cars inch past
> each other
> and pass on, warm
> beasts of the night,
>
> their engines
> lowing.
>
> * * *
>
> Dominic
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Martin Luther King Jr.
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