Ken - I've read this one a few times now and think maybe you don';t
need the dog barking at your voice angle. It stands less distracted
without it. Sometimes how a poem starts if a smoke screen for what
it's really about, like some dreams.
Just my thoughts. Its meaty and worth working on.
On 22/11/06, Kenneth Wolman <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> ...WHEREIN THE DOGS ANSWER YOUR PHONE
> My voice sends your dogs into raving fits.
> Identification is a terrible thing to waste.
> You wrote to me of the suicide
> you once loved