"metal" is much, much better in my opinion Andrew
On 11/10/06, andrew burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Sorry about this, but this poem keeps wriggling around.
> (title) Sweeping Lady of Tiayuan
> … shape of those bent shoulders
> and her entire body
> speaks of resignation
> this lady sweeping leaves away
> under a weeping tree
> as tourists by the hundred
> walk past, not noticing her,
> staring at fading buildings,
> weathered sculptures of wood and stone.
> She is breathing on earth
> the same air as they,
> as she works now, sweeping leaves …
> Holy holy holy her autumn breath,
> holy her work beneath the trees,
> holy her head more than temple ceilings,
> holy her arms more than a winding dragon,
> her visage holier than the warrior's fierce face.