Kasper,
Thanks for this. I prefer dancer to dance (although I started with dance)
as it seems more unexpected to me. I began with the image of someone
experiencing a nightmare - the muscles beneath their skin involuntarily
twitching...
Cheers
Tina
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From: "Kasper" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Wednesday, August 16, 2006 8:05 PM
Subject: Re: snap Bass - Dark Flower
>I like it very much, the language jostles on & is very crisp despite
> its breathlessness. great imagery, & the ending is adept -- mushy done
> WELL. very well.
>
> dancer --> dance?
>
> K S
>
> On 16/08/06, Tina Bass <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>> Dark Flower
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>> memories dancer
>> beneath your surface
>> accelerating
>> noise
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>> I can barely stand
>> for lying
>> concentrated
>> flesh hot-chilled
>>
>> impossibly
>> light fresh-cut
>> passages
>> hand. eye. brain
>>
>> holding you
>>
>> bringing you back
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