Tina - I got a lot from this little poem. Thank you. It got me wondering
what your accent is like, and then how accents influence the reading of a
poem, and then - before the reading - the writing of a poem. I read and
write with my ears - is this everyone's experience?
With a line like your second one - 'a shade unnatural' - the tone and hence
the connotations can change from accent to accent. It's a very apt play on
words, 'shade' being both a variation in colour and a lessening of
something. But the way you say it would give it for the reader.
Just rambling this morning - another bloody sunny day in Perth. We are
having a drought. _The West Australian_ newspaper says: Perth Rainfall: 24
hours to 9am yesterday - 6; 9am to 3pm yesterday - 0; July to 9am yesterday
9.2; July average 171.0; Rainfall, year to 9am yesterday 143.8; Average,
year to end of month 555.0; Annual average 859.0; Day of year 186. (I hear
news of London sweltering. I hope all poetryetcers are okay.)
Andrew
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From: "Tina Bass" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Wednesday, July 05, 2006 5:58 AM
Subject: SNAP Bass
Blue Bottled
Julie has purple hair
a shade unnatural
expression swiped clean
etch-a-sketch fashioned
eyelids lower (just like Lady Di)
remembering a man
who led her up the aisle
lit a flame
still burning eyes
spark off two flints colliding
lumpen. rootless.
scalp; a burnished offering
Do you see?
she smiles, explains
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