Good point, Stephen, & probably right (tonal there). I'll give it a
go....
Thanks.
We are about to enjoy a +24 day just before descending into cold &
even, possibly, more snow tomorrow....
Doug
On 20-Apr-06, at 10:36 AM, Stephen Vincent wrote:
> I am wondering, Doug, if you need "against" in the first line(?). For
> me, it
> acts as an 'aesthetic separator' from the immediate sense face of 'the
> facts' as experienced.
> I want to try:
>
> a dull metal sky
> huge white flakes
> float
>
> Etc.
> Just thinking,
>
> Heah, for the first time in weeks, we got sun all day yesterday. Wow.
> Stunned!
>
> Stephen V
> http://stephenvincent.net/blog/
>
>
>> what season is it
>>
>> against a dull metal sky
>> huge white flakes float
>> down as leaves might
>> some months hence
>> such cool beauty dissipating
>>
>>
>> Douglas Barbour
>> 11655 - 72 Avenue NW
>> Edmonton Ab T6G 0B9
>> (780) 436 3320
>> Latest book: Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
>> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
>>
>> Is that the flesh made word
>> or is that the flesh-made word?
>>
>> Fred Wah
>
>
Douglas Barbour
11655 - 72 Avenue NW
Edmonton Ab T6G 0B9
(780) 436 3320
Latest book: Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
Is that the flesh made word
or is that the flesh-made word?
Fred Wah
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