Hi Rebecca,
Perhaps I am on 'a roll' - I can't help writing this sonnetish things, some
looser than others, some more personal than others.
'disfunction and the lone' (to disentangle it for a minute) is ever my
struggle.
Best,
Jill
> I like this very much, Jill, the whole poem, even with
> the way it does seem to 'struggle' if that's what
> Stephen (?) said, conveys this feeling of struggling
> with 'all my white secrets, of disfunction and the
> lone/
> of voice I used." Not to mention that "lone of voice"
> is a most apt phrase, so telling with its echo of
> loan. And so it's as if the poem itself can't quite
> fit the feeling of not fitting the 'loose' as in
>
> > as I've never pretended I fitted those loose
> > areas of life round kitchen settings of others
> > what would I have rathered - of course, not the
> > truth
> > which dissembles as it moves across the waters.
>
> Anyway, I do think you're on a roll! (sheesh, I hope
> that translates)
>
> best,
>
> Rebecca
> --- Jill Jones <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> > Suddenly - within a moment which gives back
> > all my white secrets, of disfunction and the lone
> > of voice I used - quit exculpation! - I hacked it -
> > the sawdust lines that part of sticking brain
> > with its keys - yes, she walks by and smiles a bit
> > could not be surprised - how is it? - uncontainable
> > needy, all my revisions, hers, theirs, all my
> > backflips.
> > I can't pretend I'm just a table
> >
> > as I've never pretended I fitted those loose
> > areas of life round kitchen settings of others
> > what would I have rathered - of course, not the
> > truth
> > which dissembles as it moves across the waters.
> > I might want to ask for some things back
> > I could not expect any special orders.
> >
> >
> > Jill Jones
> > Sydney 15 Feb, 2006
> >
>
>
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