Not ignored, Stephen. Certainly not here. I brood and rejoice upon it.
I share your sadness. Your sadness is my sadness. Your heat,
my heat.
Hal
On Jan 18, 2006, at 1:54 PM, Stephen Vincent wrote:
> Gosh, Hal, I feel like my response to your great Sonnet is being
> entirely
> ignored.
> The sadness of the contributor denied.
> Now I forget what I contributed - seemed a heated celebration at
> the time!
>
> Stephen V
> http://stephenvincent.net/blog/
>
>
>
>
>> No quarrel here with your reading, Dave. For me, however, any parody
>> of Tennyson was unintentional--an echo much more than a memory, if
>> that. Bats--way down deep in the cave.
>>
>> Hal
>>
>> On Jan 17, 2006, at 7:41 PM, David Bircumshaw wrote:
>>
>>> Thirdly thoughts, Hal: I suspect that what happens, to the 'ear',
>>> is that on
>>> reading the Tennyson parody one's memory immediately triggers
>>> metre, so that
>>> recognition looks for it.
>>>
>>> Get what I'm awkwardly fumbling to say?
>>>
>>> Best
>>>
>>> Dave
>>>
>>>
>>> ----- Original Message -----
>>> From: "Halvard Johnson" <[log in to unmask]>
>>> To: <[log in to unmask]>
>>> Sent: Tuesday, January 17, 2006 2:15 PM
>>> Subject: Re: "Sonnet: Body Under a Running Stream"
>>>
>>>
>>> Thanks for the thoughts, Dave, both first and second. I'm listening
>>> more closely
>>> now to the closing rhythms and may revise those. To tell you the
>>> truth, I don't
>>> think the meter is running in this cab, so I'll have to play it by
>>> ear.
>>>
>>> Hal
>>>
>>> On Jan 17, 2006, at 4:42 AM, David Bircumshaw wrote:
>>>
>>>> On second thoughts, Hal, methinks the parodic Tennysonianism of the
>>>> conclusion does work: my initial reaction was that it went too
>>>> close in that
>>>> there was a slip into sounding as if you meant it|: parody is very
>>>> much a
>>>> double-edged weapon.
>>>> Do suspect there's a slight wobble in the metre though.
>>>>
>>>> All the Best
>>>>
>>>> Dave
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> ----- Original Message -----
>>>> From: "David Bircumshaw" <[log in to unmask]>
>>>> To: <[log in to unmask]>
>>>> Sent: Tuesday, January 17, 2006 12:26 AM
>>>> Subject: Re: "Sonnet: Body Under a Running Stream"
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> Quite impressive. I think it goes a bit Tennysonian ( as in
>>>> Ulysees) in the
>>>> concluding couplet, the metre's a bit wobbly there too, but still,
>>>> not bad
>>>> ....
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> ----- Original Message -----
>>>> From: "Halvard Johnson" <[log in to unmask]>
>>>> To: <[log in to unmask]>
>>>> Sent: Monday, January 16, 2006 3:47 PM
>>>> Subject: "Sonnet: Body Under a Running Stream"
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> Sonnet: Body Under a Running Stream
>>>>
>>>> Amusing at first, but then not. North by the Tigris
>>>> until we reached the Spirit of God, hovering over the dark
>>>> waters, finding more in common with them than we’d thought.
>>>> Diverting their water to other, less amiable purposes,
>>>>
>>>> bounded on the north by the Book of Genesis, on the south
>>>> by the Gulf of Aden, four angels caught in our crossfire.
>>>> Those who arise each morning and put on two faces,
>>>> facilitating a more effective dialogue, not surprised
>>>>
>>>> by reports of new atrocities gathered in the face of fresh,
>>>> new press restrictions, persistent rumors of imminent
>>>> withdrawals, counterpointed by PSYOP projects
>>>> that invariably failed to accomplish their purposes—
>>>>
>>>> to persuade, to change, to influence,
>>>> to interdict, to dissemble, to re-elect.
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> Hal
>>>>
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>> "A paranoid is someone who knows a little
>> of what's going on."
>> --William S. Burroughs
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