and you'd think me the last to reject "warm" "fuller" and "satisfying," wouldn't you?! wot's it all mean, P siested P?!
it means P sparest-worder P that i'm imitating you, the way warm, full, satisfying poet. anything missing in this logic? i think not (which may be why I now need a siest).
j illogic j
> From: Patrick Mc Manus <[log in to unmask]>
> Date: 2005/12/18 Sun PM 12:01:41 EST
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Re: revised poem: Adjustments
>
> Hey surfaced from siest
> May I vote for first version it seems warmer fuller/satisfying to this esp
> last line-doolally pate P seasons greets P-feed cat
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Poetryetc provides a venue for a dialogue relating to poetry and
> poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of Judy Prince
> Sent: 18 December 2005 09:38
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: revised poem: Adjustments
>
> thanks to Frank Parker's excellent suggestions to toss "ings" and other
> bits, here's revised poem:
>
>
> Adjustments
>
>
> a light
> in this inked passage
> urges us ahead
>
> past our
> loose partitions
> our torn histories
>
> through yellowed halls
> walls shrink
> and stretch
> our future
>
> we match
> patterned papers
> dying colours
> worn places
>
> we hang mirrors
> at every room end
> face ourselves
> in infinity
>
> close space
> turn time inside
> search for hand
> in hand
>
> ~~~~~
> Judy Prince
> 18.12.05
> Loughborough UK
>
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