Yes, I recognize that, & perhaps it should just stay that way; I'm only
registering my feeling that I'd like it to be occasionally broken down,
Still, it's a story, & perhaps....
On 15-Dec-05, at 8:38 AM, Richard Jeffrey Newman wrote:
> Doug wrote:
>>> I mean I found the sameness of linelength telling by the end<<
> Telling in what way? The poem is intentionally in a pretty strict blank
> verse, though I have done this before and found myself breaking the
> and the lines as I revise. This one, though, I may try to preserve in
> I don't know. I just finished the whole piece and so I've put it aside
> that I can go back to it with fresh ears and eyes in a week or so.
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