Hi Liz
yes, I did intend to flatten the rhythm in the 'to pay the gas bill' stanza,
now whether that works as an aesthetic tactic is the moot question, the
problem of mimesis against a background of no set patterns. External set
patterns that is. Ezra Pound's notion that 'to break the pentameter, that
was the first heave', was set against a background of received form. But
when doesn't have such anymore, just as notions of 'etiquette' and 'good
form' have evanesced from society, at least in the West, interesting isn't
it?
Thanks for your comments!
Best
Dave
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Sent: Friday, June 14, 2002 11:30 PM
Subject: Re: For the Speech Project?
In a message dated 6/14/02 10:11:09 GMT Daylight Time,
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> was to
> utilise the simplicities and repetitions of day to day words
yes I could see that - and I like it. I do wonder about the line breaks in
the 'to pay the gas bill' stanza - they seem to be working against the
rhythm
which strong and appropriate in the others. (Interesting that - how much
rhythm is a feature of story-telling in speech.......)
Liz
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