I am really taken by the 'Couple of drafts from Radio Nostalgie', Chris.
Thay seem to be straight realistic takes from a slightly skewed world, just
aside from ours. The sentences move forward with a fine sense of grammar &
rhythm while never quite becoming normal. The images skew neatly too, just
off the scale of the known.
One line I think had a typo:
Or losing cartilage in oiled evenings us we sit
'us' = 'as'?
Doug
Douglas Barbour
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University of Alberta
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How, but thru a monstrous 'specialism', the so-called authority
of erstwhile 'professionals', have we come to leave
_breath_ out of images and _images_ out of breath, anyhow?
Roy Kiyooka
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