That's interesting, Androo. Androo? Must be the Australian tendency to put
an o of everything.
(You may not know that. I have said that to several Australians who seemed
surprised. I first noticed it years ago. I was carpet-cleaning -- pubs
overnight, good money but killing -- and an Aussie who joined us: pass the
spotto. Which meant _would you mind awfully passing the spot remover, old
chap?_)
But back to the poem. It's been several words and none of them quite gets
what she did. It may be that what she did, the real child on the real
wall, may have to be... er... smoothed.
I'll have a think. I'm very grateful to you
L
On Thu, April 12, 2012 05:27, Andrew Burke wrote:
> Lawrenzo - I liked it all but felt, after feeling the slo-mo effect of
> the majority of the poem, that 'snatching' was a bit aggressive for her
> movement there ... Just a thought.
>
> Androo
>
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> On 12 April 2012 02:01, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>> Thanks, Doug
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>> L
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>> On Wed, April 11, 2012 19:07, Douglas Barbour wrote:
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>>> Nicely seen & juedged, especially the 'stumble' on 'that // far'...
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>>> Doug
>>> On 2012-04-11, at 9:28 AM, Lawrence Upton wrote:
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>>>
>>>> snapshot
>>>>
>>>> a child on a wall untouched a touch shaky on narrowness
>>>>
>>>> snatching at air between herself and a bush
>>>>
>>>> as if to pull them – herself and the bush – closer to each other
>>>>
>>>> unable to go that
>>>>
>>>> far without stumbling from the edginess
>>>>
>>>> urging herself “Reach! Reach!” turning towards people
>>>>
>>>> and their beyond world commands “Go away! All go!”
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>>>> -----
>>>> Lawrence Upton
>>>> Visiting Fellow, Music Dept,
>>>> Goldsmiths, University of London
>>>> New Cross, London SE14 6NW
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>>> How, but thru a monstrous 'specialism', the so-called authority of
>>> erstwhile 'professionals', have we come to leave_breath_ out of images
>>> and _images_ out of breath, anyhow?
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