I like Max's idea and agree with Andrew's chopping up,
cheers, Anny
On Wed, Jun 9, 2010 at 8:05 AM, andrew burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I arrogantly chopped it up to suit my taste, Max. 'Lovely' is a summary
> word
> which says nothing. And there were a few tautologies. Excuse me if I hqave
> offended.
>
>
>
> His daughter was like a new
> version of her mother, graceful.
>
> With so few words, her best
> task was sitting for Dad
>
> while he sculpted intently.
> A speaking likeness? Never -
>
> mute as sculptures are:
>
> her smile, noble forehead,
> withheld pain, hinting at
>
> a hope, a chance
> of expression.
>
>
>
> On 9 June 2010 10:28, Millicent <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> > I think you can start the poem with "was lovely" since the title nicely
> > serves as the first line.
> >
> > The Sculptoršs Daughter
> >
> >
> > Was lovely, like a new
> > version of her mother, graceful
> >
> >
> >
> > Millicent
> >
> >
> > -----Original Message-----
> > From: Max Richards <[log in to unmask]>
> > To: [log in to unmask]
> > Sent: Tue, Jun 8, 2010 4:33 pm
> > Subject: snap: the sculptor's daughter
> >
> >
> >
> > The Sculptoršs Daughter
> >
> > is daughter was lovely, like a new
> > ersion of her mother, graceful
> > but almost silent with so few words
> > er best task was sitting for Dad
> > while he lovingly sculpted.
> > speaking likeness? Never,
> > but mute as sculptures are,
> > hey represent her well:
> > her smile, her noble forehead,
> > uch pain, something withheld,
> > hinting a lurking hope
> > chance of expression.
> >
> > Max Richards
> >
> >
> >
>
>
> --
> Andrew
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> 'Mother Waits for Father Late' republished available at
> http://www.picaropress.com/
> http://www.qlrs.com/poem.asp?id=766
> http://frankshome.org/AndrewBurke.html
>
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