Neatly turned short lines give power here, Sharon, although I wonder if it wouldn't hit even harder without the 3rd & 6th stanzas?
Doug
On 2011-09-16, at 10:49 AM, sharon brogan wrote:
> thick, slow
> smoky days
>
> leaves at the edge
> of turning
>
> that between place
> green, but not
>
> wildfires ignite
> brilliant sunsets
>
> thoughts of friends
> old friends, lost
>
> friends, long
> absence
>
> this rain tastes
> of ashes
>
>
> --
> sharon brogan
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