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Many thanks for that reading, Sheila. I think you've found concepts there I wouldn't have been able to articulate thus - I am always interested in chance and possibilities/if, but the alternation of evidence and idea is helpful in considering the poem's working in other ways. Hugely appreciated,Jill ___________________________________________Jill Jones Latest book, Viva the Real, from UQP, shortlisted for 2019 Prime Minister's Literary Awards https://www.uqp.uq.edu.au/Book.aspx/1473/Viva%20the%20Real Jill on Twitter https://twitter.com/_jill_jones ----- Original Message ----- From: "Poetryetc: poetry and poetics" To: Cc: Sent:Tue, 1 Oct 2019 22:06:59 -0700 Subject:Re: Snap: Of What I'll Become Jill, This piece has so many places that invite the realization of a persistent oneness. Symptoms everywhere, and yet, whole entities themselves, if we press that. And we often don't. It is as though each fragment might become a starting place for more around it. You show an infinity of openings. The miracle of it seems to be the chance factor. The poem alternates between evidence and ideas. We grasp at features as though contemplating reconfiguration around what seems at first prominent, even anchoring (not to push a word like that too far, given the context). There is a sense of "if" throughout. The title seems to know the reality of gravity, the most natural conclusion to draw, and yet. And yet. The poem acknowledges that we really do not know. Thanks for a wonderful and rich piece. Sheila On Tue, Oct 1, 2019 at 6:06 PM Jill Jones wrote: > > > OF WHAT I’LL BECOME > > So some may say everything falls > > cities & repute summer apricots > > a small white plate > > rain on the gulf > > The rough is more than smooth > > light is no more fleet than time > > in fact – > > Some say this glass on the shore > > is sharp or smooth > > rough as broken stone holds light > > as it holds time > > Some say that tide > > is running out then > > back upon us > > But who are we as > > plastic beings > > shells shaped around ventricles > > & nodes blood polymer > > simple fear – > > Among this winter kelp these shadows > > on the sand pressed by futures & storms > > __________________________________________Jill Jones > Latest book, Viva the Real, from UQPshortlisted for 2019 Prime > Minister's Literary Awards > https://www.uqp.uq.edu.au/Book.aspx/1473/Viva%20the%20Real > Jill on Twitter > https://twitter.com/_jill_jones > > > ######################################################################## > > To unsubscribe from the POETRYETC list, click the following link: > https://www.jiscmail.ac.uk/cgi-bin/webadmin?SUBED1=POETRYETC&A=1 > ######################################################################## To unsubscribe from the POETRYETC list, click the following link: https://www.jiscmail.ac.uk/cgi-bin/webadmin?SUBED1=POETRYETC&A=1 ######################################################################## To unsubscribe from the POETRYETC list, click the following link: https://www.jiscmail.ac.uk/cgi-bin/webadmin?SUBED1=POETRYETC&A=1