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Just now I passed your past address, a hollow among bushes by the railway. Now you live in the former half-way house yet walk city streets like the homeless you once lived among the pavement alleys and buildings somehow still shape your life <https://www.avast.com/sig-email?utm_medium=email&utm_source=link&utm_campaign=sig-email&utm_content=webmail> Virus-free. www.avast.com <https://www.avast.com/sig-email?utm_medium=email&utm_source=link&utm_campaign=sig-email&utm_content=webmail> <#DAB4FAD8-2DD7-40BB-A1B8-4E2AA1F9FDF2> On 22 June 2017 at 23:15, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > Not quite that bad, Andrew, but I also noticed that ‘passed’, & wonder how > you might either find another line to make 2 couplets out of that tercet, > or else not worry about stanza breaks at all, at least so ordered then > broken once. The observation keeps. > > Doug > > On Jun 22, 2017, at 5:35 AM, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > > > > Yes, it's shit Bill. I'll tighten it and fiddle with 'passed' and 'past' > > ... An unedited snap from my busy brain :-) > > > > Andrew > > > > <https://www.avast.com/sig-email?utm_medium=email&utm_ > source=link&utm_campaign=sig-email&utm_content=webmail> > > Virus-free. > > www.avast.com > > <https://www.avast.com/sig-email?utm_medium=email&utm_ > source=link&utm_campaign=sig-email&utm_content=webmail> > > <#DAB4FAD8-2DD7-40BB-A1B8-4E2AA1F9FDF2> > > > > On 22 June 2017 at 18:19, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > > > >> Line one's 'passed' is odd to me, Andrew. And why the tercet among the > >> couplets? Otherwise this is of interest, the idea of shapes' effect on > >> lives. > >> > >> Bill > >> > >> On Thu, 22 Jun 2017 at 2:14 PM, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> > wrote: > >> > >>> I drive passed > >>> your past address > >>> > >>> a hollow among > >>> bushes by the railway > >>> > >>> now you live > >>> full time > >>> > >>> in the former > >>> half-way house > >>> > >>> yet walk the city streets > >>> like the homeless > >>> you once lived among > >>> > >>> the pavement > >>> alleys and buildings > >>> > >>> somehow shape > >>> your life > >>> > >>> > >>> > >>> -- > >>> Andrew > >>> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/ > >>> Books available through Walleah Press > >>> http://walleahpress.com.au > >>> > >>> > >>> > >>> > >>> > >>> < > >>> https://www.avast.com/sig-email?utm_medium=email&utm_ > >> source=link&utm_campaign=sig-email&utm_content=webmail > >>>> > >>> Virus-free. > >>> www.avast.com > >>> < > >>> https://www.avast.com/sig-email?utm_medium=email&utm_ > >> source=link&utm_campaign=sig-email&utm_content=webmail > >>>> > >>> <#DAB4FAD8-2DD7-40BB-A1B8-4E2AA1F9FDF2> > >>> > >> > > > > > > > > -- > > Andrew > > http://hispirits.blogspot.com/ > > Books available through Walleah Press > > http://walleahpress.com.au > > Douglas Barbour > [log in to unmask] > https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/ > > Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations > 2 (UofAPress). > Recording Dates (Rubicon Press). > Listen. If (UofAPress): > > > I go down to the Twilight Arcade > and watch the Martian invaders, > already appalled by our language, > pointing at what they want. > > Bill Manhire > -- Andrew http://hispirits.blogspot.com/ Books available through Walleah Press http://walleahpress.com.au