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That distance works really well, particularly the final five lines, Sharon. Just wonder whether the first three lines are necessary. I can see why you might want a line break at 'dead' but the one sentence line 'children' seems artificial. You establish distance without this. Very powerful, anyway. Bill On Friday, 21 October 2016, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > That Distance > > Someone speaks of the war and I wonder > > which war? I see photographs of dead > > children. > > That distance between > > the viewer and the image. The shooter > > and the target. The bomber > > and the bomb. > > The ballot and the battlefield. > > > [image: logo] > *Sharon Brogan* *, Watermark | a poet's notebook* > http://www.sbpoet.com > <http://www.flickr.com/photos/sbmontana/> > <http://www.facebook.com/sharon.brogan> <http://www.facebook.com/sbpoet> > <http://instagram.com/sbpoet> <http://sbpoet.tumblr.com/> > Latest Tweet: <https://twitter.com/sbpoet> RT @pourmecoffee: > <https://twitter.com/pourmecoffee:> @realDonaldTrump > <https://twitter.com/realDonaldTrump> I am getting sleepy. Do you have a > feel for how long you will be rage-tweeting? Read More > <https://twitter.com/sbpoet/statuses/788975936754417664> > Get a signature like this: Click here! > <http://ws-promos.appspot.com/r?rdata=eyJydXJsIjogImh0dHA6Ly93d3cud2 > lzZXN0YW1wLmNvbS9lbWFpbC1pbnN0YWxsP3dzX25jaWQ9NjcyMjk0MDA4Jn > V0bV9zb3VyY2U9ZXh0ZW5zaW9uJnV0bV9tZWRpdW09ZW1haWwmdXRtX2NhbX > BhaWduPXByb21vXzU3MzI1Njg1NDg3Njk3OTIiLCAiZSI6ICI1NzMyNTY4NT > Q4NzY5NzkyIn0=&u=269749309366989> > > > -- > sharon brogan > http://www.sbpoet.com > http://www.sbpoet.net > http://smallpoems.sbpoet.net > 406.578.1788 >