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Thank you, Doug! Much appreciated! Intriguing to find how one thing changes the whole! Sheila On Wed, Aug 19, 2015 at 8:32 AM, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > I enjoyed both versions, Sheila. But this one (a bit like Jill’s) takes > the pronoun shifts a bit further. > > There’s a gentle but solid movement to the whole… > > Doug > On Aug 18, 2015, at 11:41 PM, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> > wrote: > > > *I have changed it as you recommended, Andrew. Brilliant. MUCH better. > > Thank you! Sheila * > > > > *Smoke* > > > > > > Where she listens, her small breath > > is heard, not smoke, not voice, > > not thin wind, just the blend > > of each one being where they are > > > > Where she is, they are > > indistinguishable from the sound > > of thin smoke rising > > to the heat of afternoon > > > > Where they are, trees are, > > along the warm cement wall > > where they sit, and where she smokes > > the slender brand, this gentle afternoon > > > > Where they speak, they do not hear > > smoke rise toward the blue > > behind lace branches where the shadow > > mimics slight moves of receiving branches > > > > Sheila E. Murphy > > Douglas Barbour > [log in to unmask] > > Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2 > (UofAPress). > Recording Dates (Rubicon Press). > > Done in by creation itself. > > I mean the gods. Not us. Well us too. > The gods moved into books. Who wrote the books? > We wrote the books. In whose dream, then are we dreaming? > > Robert Kroetsch. >