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a mini-narrative in a tight form. The first line is a different kind of register than the rest - the 'study' carries so many possibilities it is not anchored like the rest of the words. But I urge you to write it again with a change in that area - it's a little gem. Could be part of a verse novella :-) Andrew On 2 July 2015 at 09:37, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > Fair enough, Doug. The poem was suggested by my current reading of H H > Richardson's The Fortunes of Richard Mahoney, where I encountered the > expression 'fell into a brown study' and loved it. Kind of recognised it > and challenged myself to begin a poem with the expression, even if I dos > tweak it a little. Glad you liked the ending which just kind of fell out. > > Max, you of course fall into desks I see this week, of any colour you > like, or rather others fall into studies in whatever room of the house. > > I'm wearing a brown jumper this morning. Will this affect my mood? > > Bill > > > On 2 Jul 2015, at 7:38 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > > > > Perhaps my unsure response is exactly what you wanted this to ensure, > Bill. I think the final couplet works well,but al not sure of the first… > > > > Doug > >> On Jun 30, 2015, at 4:22 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> > wrote: > >> > >> Into a brown study > >> Herbert collapsed > >> > >> Jennifer had lied > >> again > >> > >> He hated > >> catching her out > >> > >> But could no more > >> stop his checking > >> > >> than cleanse him > >> self without soap > >> > >> bw > > > > Douglas Barbour > > [log in to unmask] > > > > Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation > 2 (UofAPress). > > Recording Dates (Rubicon Press). > > > > Done in by creation itself. > > > > I mean the gods. Not us. Well us too. > > The gods moved into books. Who wrote the books? > > We wrote the books. In whose dream, then are we dreaming? > > > > Robert Kroetsch. > > >