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Hi Bill was just thinking of the temptations to rewrite meddle wreck other
peoples poems -you see it horribly rearing its head in workshops- you see a
delicate maybe not very good poem by some-one destroyed by them losing its
original charm
P

-----Original Message-----
From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
Behalf Of Bill Wootton
Sent: 22 July 2015 10:43
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Subject: Re: Drifters

All right, Pat, so a combination of the two. I'll have to get my editing
boots on again it seems. 

Thanks,
Bill

On 22/07/2015, at 6:21 PM, Patrick McManus wrote:

> Hi Bill liked gist of this -not sure you need brackets-personally I 
> preferred the ending to the first version -the second version ending 
> seemed to this old soul a bit clunky -maybe it's just me !!cheers P
> 
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] 
> On Behalf Of Bill Wootton
> Sent: 21 July 2015 23:00
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Drifters
> 
> Drifters
> 
> First drift
> 
> Can words drift
> into poetry,
> (begin prosaically,
> informatively, looking
> for all the world at first,
> like workmanlike,
> jobbing sentence components)
> and then,
> (right under your eyes as it were,
> before you're aware)
> transform
> through dent of odd
> placement
> or line
> turn,
> into thought-provocative
> perception-inverters,
> mood-changers,
> joy inspirers,
> propellers
> into the
> uncanny?
> 
> 
> Second drift
> 
> Can words drift into poetry?
> Beginning prosaically,
> informatively, looking
> for all the world,
> to be workmanlike,
> jobbing sentence components,
> then right beneath your eyes,
> as it were,
> before you're aware,
> transforming,
> through dent of odd
> placement
> or line
> turn,
> into mood-changers,
> joy-inspirers,
> perception-inverters,
> propellers
> into uncanny mind zones?
> 
> bw
> 22 .7.15
> 
> Preferences, other ideas, people of the poetryetc?
>