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Hi L. Like the sense of observed life in decay here. Couple of things: do you need 'maybe' to finish line 3? And to what does 'it's' refer in line 7? The moon? The gull? Last three lines full of engaging entanglements. B > On 13 May 2015, at 4:19 pm, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > > you'll see sometimes an old or infirm gull, > > a bit grubby, long since less than ebullient, > > limping in a length of fishing line maybe -- > > > that's how their seasons end, rapidly slowing > > towards the speed of stone; still in motion; > > > the swaying moon glides on, turning, vacuous; > > > it's a hobbled chunk of an avalanche > > banging towards the big emptiness, opening > > it for rock to fly in tethering circles > > > of curves; parabolas; and springs of straightness > > through meshwork of nested slingshots; tangled? >