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Thank you, Bill. I see what you mean here. Punctuation does swerve the thing (and things). I appreciate your comment. Always welcome that. Sheila On Tue, Oct 28, 2014 at 1:04 AM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > You probably don't need to (look), Sheila. Not that you need to 'explain', > I just wondered whether the lake was the colour (of) snow or the colour, > generally, was snow or something else I am missing. Anyway, the parting > comes across so well. > > Bill > > > > On 28 Oct 2014, at 6:35 pm, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> > wrote: > > > > Thank you, Bill. I will take a look at this! > >> On Oct 28, 2014 12:33 AM, "Bill Wootton" <[log in to unmask]> > wrote: > >> > >> Like the gentle, nostalgic feel, Sheila, esp stanzas 1, 3, 4. Line 5 for > >> me, however, confounds. Perhaps it's just a punctuation thing? > >> > >> Bill > >> > >> > >>>> On 28 Oct 2014, at 12:35 pm, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> > >>> wrote: > >>> > >>> A spindly and > >>> transparent winter > >>> parts from > >>> > >>> lake > >>> the color snow, > >>> foreground > >>> > >>> of sticks > >>> alongside > >>> evening's pale > >>> > >>> sky parted > >>> from shared > >>> place. > >>> > >>> Sheila E. Murphy > > >