 |
 |
That's ok, Andrew. Digressing upon 'football', a friend I were chatting about things yesterday, as you do, and we came across the creepy coincidence that the demise of public executions in Victorian England coincided rather too well with the rise of organised football. Am becoming almost an enthusiast for the removal of the second 'still'. Case against, anybody/ Best Dave On 20 August 2014 11:20, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > Oh, I foolishly misread 'footfall' as 'football'! Not once, but a number of > times! Ha ha ha ... It's me beady old eyes deceiving me, without benefit of > intelligence. > > Sorry! No wonder I was confused ... > > Andrew > > > On 20 August 2014 18:10, David Bircumshaw <[log in to unmask]> > wrote: > > > Am now slightly turning towards excising the second 'still' but not yet > > wholly convinced :) Hard life, poetry, innit? > > > > > > On 20 August 2014 08:30, David Bircumshaw <[log in to unmask]> > > wrote: > > > > > Football Andrew?!!! I think not :) > > > > > > Still have a primitive fondness for the still though :) > > > > > > David > > > > > > > > > On 20 August 2014 04:52, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > > > > > >> Well, I'm a little lost - the football reference threw me sideways > away > > >> from battle and/or space ... But still I like the movement and sound > of > > it > > >> (without the 'still' :-) )) > > >> > > >> I'll just read it later - in a different mood, in a different room ... > > >> > > >> Andrew > > >> > > >> > > >> On 20 August 2014 08:12, David Bircumshaw <[log in to unmask]> > > >> wrote: > > >> > > >> > Thanks Sheila. that might be a good idea, although I'm still > thinking > > >> on it > > >> > :) > > >> > > > >> > > > >> > On 19 August 2014 23:07, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> > > wrote: > > >> > > > >> > > I really like this, David. Tiny suggestions would be to remove the > > >> second > > >> > > "still" (final stanza line 3) for effect. > > >> > > > > >> > > Great work! Sheila > > >> > > > > >> > > > > >> > > On Tue, Aug 19, 2014 at 3:00 PM, Bill Wootton < > > >> [log in to unmask]> > > >> > > wrote: > > >> > > > > >> > > > Moving, David. I get the gratitude I think. I found myself > reading > > >> > 'bank' > > >> > > > for 'blank' but maybe that's the final river interposing. Like > > >> > > particularly > > >> > > > 'footfall echo maps'. > > >> > > > > > >> > > > Bill > > >> > > > > > >> > > > > On 20 Aug 2014, at 7:48 am, David Bircumshaw < > > >> > > [log in to unmask]> > > >> > > > wrote: > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > * Scantling Saywas* > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > Even though the walls > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > Collapsed like lungs > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > Even though to speak > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > Burnt like a grate > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > Even though your body > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > Melted into space > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > Even though the blank > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > Was flamed through with holes > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > The morning still maintained > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > A message from before > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > The paths still proclaimed > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > Footfall echo maps > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > And afternoons still basked > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > A scent of light turning > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > Over on an open river > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > -- > > >> > > > > David Joseph Bircumshaw > > >> > > > > Website and A Chide's Alphabet > > >> > > > > http://www.staplednapkin.org.uk > > >> > > > > The Animal Subsides > > >> > http://www.arrowheadpress.co.uk/books/animal.html > > >> > > > > Facebook: http://www.facebook.com/david.bircumshaw > > >> > > > > Tumblr: http://zantikus.tumblr.com/ > > >> > > > > twitter: http://twitter.com/bucketshave > > >> > > > > blog: http://groggydays.blogspot.com/ > > >> > > > > Leicester Poetry Society: http://www.poetryleicester.com > > >> > > > > > > >> > > > > > >> > > > > >> > > > >> > > > >> > > > >> > -- > > >> > David Joseph Bircumshaw > > >> > Website and A Chide's Alphabet > > >> > http://www.staplednapkin.org.uk > > >> > The Animal Subsides > http://www.arrowheadpress.co.uk/books/animal.html > > >> > Facebook: http://www.facebook.com/david.bircumshaw > > >> > Tumblr: http://zantikus.tumblr.com/ > > >> > twitter: http://twitter.com/bucketshave > > >> > blog: http://groggydays.blogspot.com/ > > >> > Leicester Poetry Society: http://www.poetryleicester.com > > >> > > > >> > > >> > > >> > > >> -- > > >> Andrew > > >> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/ > > >> 'Undercover of Lightness' > > >> http://walleahpress.com.au/recent-publications.html > > >> 'Shikibu Shuffle' > > >> > > >> > > > http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com.au/2012/03/new-from-aboveground-press-shikibu.html > > >> > > > > > > > > > > > > -- > > > David Joseph Bircumshaw > > > Website and A Chide's Alphabet > > > http://www.staplednapkin.org.uk > > > The Animal Subsides http://www.arrowheadpress.co.uk/books/animal.html > > > Facebook: http://www.facebook.com/david.bircumshaw > > > Tumblr: http://zantikus.tumblr.com/ > > > twitter: http://twitter.com/bucketshave > > > blog: http://groggydays.blogspot.com/ > > > Leicester Poetry Society: http://www.poetryleicester.com > > > > > > > > > > > -- > > David Joseph Bircumshaw > > Website and A Chide's Alphabet > > http://www.staplednapkin.org.uk > > The Animal Subsides http://www.arrowheadpress.co.uk/books/animal.html > > Facebook: http://www.facebook.com/david.bircumshaw > > Tumblr: http://zantikus.tumblr.com/ > > twitter: http://twitter.com/bucketshave > > blog: http://groggydays.blogspot.com/ > > Leicester Poetry Society: http://www.poetryleicester.com > > > > > > -- > Andrew > http://hispirits.blogspot.com/ > 'Undercover of Lightness' > http://walleahpress.com.au/recent-publications.html > 'Shikibu Shuffle' > > http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com.au/2012/03/new-from-aboveground-press-shikibu.html > -- David Joseph Bircumshaw Website and A Chide's Alphabet http://www.staplednapkin.org.uk The Animal Subsides http://www.arrowheadpress.co.uk/books/animal.html Facebook: http://www.facebook.com/david.bircumshaw Tumblr: http://zantikus.tumblr.com/ twitter: http://twitter.com/bucketshave blog: http://groggydays.blogspot.com/ Leicester Poetry Society: http://www.poetryleicester.com