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by my standards sandals rhymes with bangles… Max I specially like dress of the geometric period On 15 May 2014, at 2:58 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > Ah, well. > > I'd ask whether or not you want to paragraph more or find a way to make it more like verse? > > And do you want any mention of the I (eye) in there? > > D > On May 14, 2014, at 10:46 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > >> actually I smudged it a bit more only this morning >> it's really quite old and Ive been leaving some of the problems that I >> found in this - in that I was avoiding the same (generic) problems in other >> pieces >> for some reason they are what I am working on now >> that isnt what I planned to be doing now but that's the way it is >> most of the problematic pieces are being binned as I realise or decide that >> the problems are evasions, that the work isnt really that good! >> this is okayish, I think >> >> L >> >> On 14 May 2014 17:29, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote: >> >>> A sharp sketch, L, & fixed, now, in time... >>> >>> D >>> On May 14, 2014, at 7:07 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]> >>> wrote: >>> >>>> palms queues >>>> >>>> a worried man, perhaps, looking over his glasses at me, a short while >>> ago, >>>> when I sat in this, which, I suppose, is a reception chair >>>> >>>> looking at money; *seems* worried; just now; cubic inches of notes in >>>> dulled multicolour; and an adding machine, which he taps at random >>>> >>>> my love, drawn and tired, this and that looking, a bird >>>> >>>> woman with chemical-gold hair and silver shoes >>>> >>>> anxious woman in smart black pleated skirt and white silk blouse; >>> handsome; >>>> wedding ring; stockings -- it's thirty-nine degrees -- sandles with one >>> and >>>> a half inch heels; face taut with temporary concern showing the >>> structure; >>>> gold plate bangles; thirty-five perhaps; but, now, as she turns, and as >>> she >>>> pulls at the door, more likely forty, and may be more >>>> >>>> tall man in jeans >>>> >>>> woman in dress of the geometric period >>>> >>>> on the wall, great bank notes of the past, I suppose, in frames; visa >>>> travellers cheques no apostrophe; hand-written note in Greek saying >>> closed >>>>