With each addition, Lawrence, a larger (I guess I'd have to say, philosophical) vision inheres. Here, even with the comic turn at the end, it's the 'commentary' (also seen in others) that pushes the whole along...
So I do see the whole, as it comes into some kind of focus, as definitely going to be more than the sum of its parts...
(I'm thinking of the discourse in the 3rd stanza...).
Doug
On 2011-11-04, at 5:51 AM, Lawrence Upton wrote:
> a system
> drained off to emptiness
> boats where they
> tipped sideways
> a variety of drunks
> liquidless
> tipped sideways
>
> land-living fauna
> stepped their way
> beyond the two-dimensioned harbour
> sinking outside the box into yellow and green
>
> there, tattered birds chatter
> at each other
> and squabble
> smacking out brutality
> new relentless applications
> of tiny end waves
> to the unintended picture
> in which every mark has its own causality
> or its own human purpose
>
> I see it!
> I see what you have not seen,
> what I have seen from causalities and purposes
> and what the eyes take in
>
> I see it, and spray
> it with my structures
> old tom that I am
>
>
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