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i don't think the smokescreening is no this side, Patrick; nut nevr mind L On Tue, November 8, 2011 19:34, Patrick McManus wrote: > Dear L 'Courage and convictions' !!do you realise that I risk my life > (and > perhaps my limited sanity!)commenting on your poems I have the courage but > not the conviction -am not convinced at all -but I do tread so carefully > not to hurt feeling-a failing I admit leaves me open to ranting > justification even nasty long words like -syntactically smokescreenings I > humbly wish you well have and stew in your fought for 'continuity' P > bravely ttffnntfn > > -----Original Message----- > From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On > Behalf Of Lawrence Upton > Sent: 08 November 2011 17:14 > To: [log in to unmask] > Subject: Re: The Bar between St Agnes and The Gugh from Wingletang > > > oh dear, have the courage of your conviction, man! > > having said which I think the word is essential and that you are > missing... > > syntactically it leaves > > cream and white and dangerous > > unusefully ambiguous if you delete the word > > ttfn > > > On Tue, November 8, 2011 16:55, Patrick McManus wrote: > >> Sundering I sunder sometimes cheers P great stuff >> Not sure if we need continuity? (no doubt essential and that I am >> missing the whole point!!) >> >> -----Original Message----- >> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On >> Behalf Of Lawrence Upton >> Sent: 08 November 2011 13:12 >> To: [log in to unmask] >> Subject: The Bar between St Agnes and The Gugh from Wingletang >> >> >> >> A strong quick fluster of crayon lines >> jabbing through into storm waves >> >> blue wash over grey, and green within both; and slow broad unripe >> depths atop drawn stab marks joining rock and rocks tenuously despite >> encroaching sea breakers rising moving crabwise >> >> brown smatterings of weed break up cream and white and dangerous >> continuity The Gugh may be solid beyond the east of Agnes >> >> but it's not whole >> >> all this a sundering of one into two, and three if sea's a thing >> >> >> >> ----- >> UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton >> 42 pages; A5 paperback; colour cover >> Writers Forum 978 1 84254 277 4 >> wfuk.org.uk/blog ---- >> >> > > > ----- > UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton > 42 pages; A5 paperback; colour cover > Writers Forum 978 1 84254 277 4 > wfuk.org.uk/blog ---- > > ----- UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton 42 pages; A5 paperback; colour cover Writers Forum 978 1 84254 277 4 wfuk.org.uk/blog ----