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Dear L 'Courage and convictions' !!do you realise that I risk my life (and perhaps my limited sanity!)commenting on your poems I have the courage but not the conviction -am not convinced at all -but I do tread so carefully not to hurt feeling-a failing I admit leaves me open to ranting justification even nasty long words like -syntactically smokescreenings I humbly wish you well have and stew in your fought for 'continuity' P bravely ttffnntfn -----Original Message----- From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of Lawrence Upton Sent: 08 November 2011 17:14 To: [log in to unmask] Subject: Re: The Bar between St Agnes and The Gugh from Wingletang oh dear, have the courage of your conviction, man! having said which I think the word is essential and that you are missing... syntactically it leaves cream and white and dangerous unusefully ambiguous if you delete the word ttfn On Tue, November 8, 2011 16:55, Patrick McManus wrote: > Sundering I sunder sometimes cheers P great stuff > Not sure if we need continuity? (no doubt essential and that I am missing > the whole point!!) > > -----Original Message----- > From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On > Behalf Of Lawrence Upton > Sent: 08 November 2011 13:12 > To: [log in to unmask] > Subject: The Bar between St Agnes and The Gugh from Wingletang > > > A strong quick fluster of crayon lines > jabbing through into storm waves > > blue wash over grey, and green within both; and slow broad unripe depths > atop drawn stab marks joining rock and rocks tenuously despite encroaching > sea breakers rising moving crabwise > > brown smatterings of weed break up cream and white and dangerous > continuity The Gugh may be solid beyond > the east of Agnes > > but it's not whole > > all this a sundering of one into two, and three if sea's a thing > > > > ----- > UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton > 42 pages; A5 paperback; colour cover > Writers Forum 978 1 84254 277 4 > wfuk.org.uk/blog ---- > > ----- UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton 42 pages; A5 paperback; colour cover Writers Forum 978 1 84254 277 4 wfuk.org.uk/blog ----