luncheon under flowering dogwood
white linen tablecloth
white bowls fill
white petals salad
white wine plentiful
-----Original Message-----
From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of Judy Prince
Sent: 10 February 2010 21:05
To: [log in to unmask]
Subject: Re: Snap (this time)
Me old eyes missing a bit o' the text....!
Re chinoiserie and I think japanoiserie, the same averseness for "the" and
"a" and "he" and "she" [a general ungendered personal pronoun instead, in
Chinese]. I feel an imitation coming on:
Joodles Aping An Asian Makar's Poem
luncheon under flowering dogwood
white linen tablecloth
white bowls fill
white petals salad
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jbp
On 10 February 2010 12:29, David Bircumshaw <[log in to unmask]>wrote:
> Sorry Judy, I meant in the text of the e-mail, as in : ('ve revised ...
>
> (looking at chinoiserie is making this writer first person averse a verse,
> m'kingdom for the worse)
>
> On 10 February 2010 20:22, Judy Prince <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>
> > If you wish, Dave, please post one of those earlier versions showing your
> > wrestling down the irritant first person; otherwise, I can't imagine it
> > well
> > enuff.
> >
> > joods
> >
> > On 10 February 2010 12:02, David Bircumshaw <[log in to unmask]
> > >wrote:
> >
> > > Ta, joodles ('ve revised it three times already y'know - do you like my
> > > (eek) just solution to the irritant first person?)
> > >
> > > On 10 February 2010 16:32, Judy Prince <[log in to unmask]>
> > > wrote:
> > >
> > > > Yeah, love it!
> > > >
> > > > joodles
> > > >
> > > > On 10 February 2010 02:08, David Bircumshaw <
> [log in to unmask]
> > > > >wrote:
> > > >
> > > > > *For now, as it tries to get in*
> > > > > **
> > > > >
> > > > > A squall of snow stopped, frustrated
> > > > > on your stilled liquid : pane
> > > > >
> > > > >
> > > > >
> > > > > --
> > > > > David Bircumshaw
> > > > > "A window./Big enough to hold screams/
> > > > > You say are poems" - DMeltzer
> > > > > Website and A Chide's Alphabet
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> > > > "I can't read my library card." ---Jeff Hecker, Norfolk, VA
> > > >
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > > --
> > > David Bircumshaw
> > > "A window./Big enough to hold screams/
> > > You say are poems" - DMeltzer
> > > Website and A Chide's Alphabet
> > > http://www.staplednapkin.org.uk
> > > The Animal Subsides http://www.arrowheadpress.co.uk/books/animal.html
> > > Facebook: http://www.facebook.com/david.bircumshaw
> > > twitter: http://twitter.com/bucketshave
> > > blog: http://groggydays.blogspot.com/
> > >
> >
> >
> >
> > --
> > Frisky Moll Press: http://judithprince.com/home.html
> >
> > "I can't read my library card." ---Jeff Hecker, Norfolk, VA
> >
>
>
>
> --
> David Bircumshaw
> "A window./Big enough to hold screams/
> You say are poems" - DMeltzer
> Website and A Chide's Alphabet
> http://www.staplednapkin.org.uk
> The Animal Subsides http://www.arrowheadpress.co.uk/books/animal.html
> Facebook: http://www.facebook.com/david.bircumshaw
> twitter: http://twitter.com/bucketshave
> blog: http://groggydays.blogspot.com/
>
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