Lovely poem Doug -
I especially like "what used / to be east germany"
To my mind it would feel unbalanced and unfinished without the 3 long beats (a molossus!) of the final line.
Brian
--- On Thu, 1/10/09, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
From: Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
Subject: memory snap
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Received: Thursday, 1 October, 2009, 6:14 AM
that voice ethereal
soaring wafted
into elevator
rising in some
small hotel in
some small city
in what used
to be east germany
constant & craving
we rise too
[sometimes a lyric (nostalgia) just hits one)
I enjoyed the other snaps today, all those short shots....
Douglas Barbour
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