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Yes, Doug, I am there, hearing the voice wafting into the elevator. I agree with Fred: the last line is too tidy and closes off the active image, still constant and still craving. Andrew 2009/10/1 Frederick Pollack <[log in to unmask]> > ----- Original Message ----- From: "Douglas Barbour" < > [log in to unmask]> > To: <[log in to unmask]> > Sent: Wednesday, September 30, 2009 4:14 PM > Subject: memory snap > > > that voice ethereal >> soaring wafted >> into elevator >> rising in some >> small hotel in >> some small city >> in what used >> to be east germany >> constant & craving >> we rise too >> >> >> > Beautiful, Doug. But I don't think you need the last line. > -- Andrew http://hispirits.blogspot.com/