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ooh, we got a live one here, poets! I like it (obviously). The lightdark simplicity of the language. It's like an elegant black-and-white photograph. The only suggestion of emotional content in this poem comes from the repetition. If you condensed it, that might be lost. Janet 2008/11/26 robert e. watling jr. <[log in to unmask]> > A friend on the New Poetry list suggested Poetryetc might be interested in > this poem. She made reference to a certain "VB"? Please be gentle with this, > my first offering to the list. Thanks. > > crows > > crows have chased away the songbirds > in the morning I hear nothing > later I hear nothing but crows > > outside, and below my window > a wall seen only in winter > then one morning a big white cat > > it is raining here this morning > wet leaves, wet shingles on the roof > wet cat sitting on the brick wall > > rewjr > > -- > "Cogito ergo...how does that go again?"...rewjr. > -- I'm looking for writing-related paid work! Performance (my poetry, yours or someone else's); any kind of writing including technical or corporate; ghostwriting; editing; teaching creative writing, poetry or performance; selling books; literary administration... whatever. All leads appreciated. Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]> www.proximitypoetry.com (Poetry) www.myspace.com/poetjj (Includes occasional arts & culture blog) The Line Mine, bulletin board for Perth poetry & spoken word: [log in to unmask] groups.yahoo.com/group/thelinemine Breastfeeding info & help: www.breastfeeding.asn.au