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why make the moon something as specific as a messenger or a harbinger? both words also taste cliché. KS On 21/04/2008, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > curious: why not 'harbinger'? > > how about 'messenger'? > > and -- I forgot to add the Full Moon info: Apr. 20, 6:25 a.m. EDT — > Full Pink Moon. The grass pink or wild ground phlox is one of the > earliest widespread flowers of the spring. Other names were the Full > Sprouting Grass Moon, the Egg Moon, and — among coastal tribes — the > Full Fish Moon, when the shad came upstream to spawn. > http://www.space.com/spacewatch/080118-ns-moon-names.html > > > > On Mon, Apr 21, 2008 at 10:38 AM, judy prince <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > > Like Ole Mole (I think it was), I don't go a bundle on "harbinger". Yeah, K, "bringer" works better . . . unless Sharon can come up with a sub word or line. But I love the packed power of all the rest, wouldnae change a bit. > > > > Keep us well supplied with your poems, Sharon---of any kind. > > > > Best, > > > > Judy > > > > ----- Original Message ----- From: "kasper salonen" <[log in to unmask]> > > To: <[log in to unmask]> > > Sent: Monday, April 21, 2008 8:38 AM > > Subject: Re: Pink Moon > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > yes, how about 'bringer of spring'? > > > an article before 'crow', since you have one before all the other nouns? > > > the end is a little bland, I got a sort of minor 'so what' reaction. > > > there's a drama that needn't be there, it undermines the imagery I > > > think. > > > > > > another great moon-poem though. I dug immensely > > > > > > KS > > > > > > On 20/04/2008, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > > > > > > > Pink Moon, Egg Moon, > > > > you bring snow > > > > and crow complaining > > > > from the spruce tree. > > > > You bury the crocus. > > > > You bend the trees down. > > > > Grass Moon, Fish Moon, > > > > harbinger of spring, > > > > why are you so cold? > > > > > > > > > > > > -- > > > > > > > > > > > > ~ SB | http://www.sbpoet.com | =^..^= > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > -- > > > ~ SB | http://www.sbpoet.com | =^..^= >