Not the sort of thing _I can do_, I meant... > Hi Dave > > Not the sort of thing idea, but if this is a draft, it's a good one. > > I like the way you contrast the specificity of the 1848 events with > the vagueness/fadedness of the link to you. The interplay of images > (such as between the fuse of the Manifesto and the firedamp) works > well for me (had to check up on Kossuth, though). > > I'm not sure about the first line - even if it's necessary in light of > the title. Also not sure about co-patrilineal: trying to compress to > much into the line, maybe? > > If you've got more like these, I'd like to see them. > > Regards > > Martin >> Circum circa >> >> Circa a European Year of Revolutions, >> of Kossuth and Cavour and Louis Napoleon's Eighteenth Brumaire, >> when Chartists massed, faintly tinted in life colours, >> in the first known crowd photograph >> and a grim economist fused a hissing manifesto, >> one man found everything to lose, >> one man preserved >> >> by the Heanor and District Historical Society, >> one man who might have been >> co-patrilineal >> >> to this one, scribbling here, a bone trace of age unstated, >> Joseph of my surname, asphyxiated (circa) >> 1848 at a firedamp lit hard seam at Loscoe pit. >> >> >