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hey little bird fly away home your house is on fire you're children are alone -- TW KS On 02/01/2008, Larissa Shmailo <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > > In a message dated 1/2/2008 7:24:06 AM Eastern Standard Time, > [log in to unmask] writes: > > the personification of the ladybird (which word I prefer to the AmE. > 'ladybug'!) as a middle-aged woman was delightful, but it feels to me > that along with the LOAM you brought in other clichés as well, or what > I perceive as such; burning/yearning, Eros growing old, and the > phoenix. they all lessened the effect of the power in the setup & in > the middle stanza, as did the obscure 'music' at the end, which had no > link or precedent within the poem & came off as shallow. > > the tone was right on though, at least. > > > Dear KS, > > The poem is a response to Keats, :To Autumn," the "music" is from that poem > and several lines are reworks of ot. And the ladybug is from the children's > ditty :ladybug, ladybug, fly away home, your house is on fire. Many of the > perceptions of female aging are cliches. But thanks for the read, and I'll look > again. > > Best, > > Larissa > Larissa Shmailo (http://myspace.com/larissaworld) > "The poet, like the lover, is a menace on the assembly line." > -Rollo May > > _http://_ (http://larissashmailo.blogspot.com/) > _www.myspace.com/thenonetworld_ (http://www.myspace.com/thenonetworld) > _http://larissashmailo.blogspot.com_ (http://larissashmailo.blogspot.com/) > > > > > > > **************************************See AOL's top rated recipes > (http://food.aol.com/top-rated-recipes?NCID=aoltop00030000000004) >