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Enjoyed this -when the cats away poem--Janet does he read this site -what a home coming!!!I sort of read the second verse /feels like it should follow as first (says this ignorant old git!) Cheers Patrick -----Original Message----- From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of Janet Jackson Sent: 23 January 2008 13:29 To: [log in to unmask] Subject: snap, JJ Snapshot 23-01-2008 When he phones, nine hours behind, I narrowcast news: I pruned the lime tree. The sky is windy. The children are happy but missing you. We saw a movie -- 'The Water Horse'. Wonderful. You ought to see it. How're you doing? I don't say I rearranged the kitchen, moved his clock radio, found his hammer drill and put up some shelves -- or that the children tidied his workshop. Or that I haven't put one piece in the jigsaw we started before he left. *** Comments: the second stanza was originally in messy, heavily enjambed free verse, but I didn't like it and went for prose. For once this poem is literally true, except the lime tree... it was actually a lemon, two oranges and a mandarin. Janet -- Janet Jackson [log in to unmask] www.proximity.webhop.net www.myspace.com/poetjj -- No virus found in this incoming message. Checked by AVG Free Edition. Version: 7.5.516 / Virus Database: 269.19.9/1238 - Release Date: 22/01/2008 20:12