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Max - many fine images and good layers of juxtaposition between 'animal' life and 'human' (awareness of) death. Maybe it would be stronger as a pantoum in a future draft... some great elements to abutt here ... Andrew On 09/08/07, Patrick McManus <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > > Max---Seems a lot of warmth and colour here > Cheers Patrick > > -----Original Message----- > From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On > Behalf Of cooee > Sent: 08 August 2007 08:54 > To: [log in to unmask] > Subject: snap: Monochrome > > Monochrome > > Two sleeping dogs breathe > quietly in the passage > outside the bedroom door, > bedded there from > lights-out till dawn > unless restless stalking > to the back door > which may or may not be ajar. > > Tomorrow, weıve > a funeral to attend, > not family but almost; > their loss darkens > the long night but we sleep. > > The heatingıs off. > Should the temperature drop > more than usual, > here comes the pup > one easy leap > to boldly nestle > between man and wife. > > Soon his warm weight > pushes me out, > our day begins. > Whatıs behind > the bedroom blind? > This morningıs not frosty, > itıs misty moisty, > dawn lags too. > > This family, > we all slept in > mercifully, > even the old dog > with her dream > of early breakfast. > A biscuit for her, > gracefully taken, > one for pup, snatched; > the morning paper for me > and a slow cup of tea. > > A funeral to attend, > not family, but almost. > A good man gone, > whoıd lived well. > This life as much as > 'the other life' > held his faith. > And family. > Darkness waited for him > until he was ready. > > > Wednesday 8 August 2007 > Max Richards > Doncaster, Victoria > > > -- > No virus found in this incoming message. > Checked by AVG Free Edition. > Version: 7.5.476 / Virus Database: 269.11.8/940 - Release Date: 06/08/2007 > 16:53 > -- Andrew http://hispirits.blogspot.com/ http://www.inblogs.net/hispirits http://www.flickr.com/photos/aburke/