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this would work better with more traditional punctuation &c. the tone is a little lost at the moment, I'd say it needs a sturdier structure KS On 08/08/07, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > neighbors come and go > in the smokey heat > > this house is dark > and cool, cats complaining > > of boredom and neglect > yowling up and down > > the dusty staircase > why do we live each day? > > through fire and flood > and darkening news > > the absence of loves > everywhere, pain > > women laugh > loudly, in the street > > don't they know? > > > > -- > > ~ SB =^..^= > > http://www.sbpoet.com >