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ok, this has obviously been a respectfuly epic undertaking (no pun intended, what with "peril of death"..), & I congratulate you on finishing BOTH homeric paperweights. the limericks make for a tone that is farcically light, amusing, & delightfully sacrilidgeous... BUT (& this is the Critical Response part of this response) to begin with, this is an absolute pain to read. it really is. the fenangling with fitting the phrases into the limerick form is like watching a fat woman put on a corset. most of the attempts are humorous because they're so obviously a struggle to fit & rhyme, but fairly soon this becomes tiresome. with this reading, I would suggest that the ENTIRE thing be proofread & rewritten with much closer adherance ot the limerick metre to make this smooth -- though I'm not volunteering for the job. HOWEVER (& this is the Verdict part of this response) I've discovered that if both these epics are read as free verse, rather than as limericks with the limerick metre in mind, it reads better & practically without snags -- all snags, whatsmore, seem unabashed & intentional. it seems that the only part of the 'limerick' mindset that should be retained when reading these is the necessity for (iconically chlidish) rhyme, the scheme & vague length of the lines, & the wildly flailing tendency for the ridiculous (which makes the Odyssey & Iliad great candidates for the project to begin with) -- the only problem for me personally is, with my metric background going back to junior high, that I can't shake the desire to read this as tadaTUM tadaTUM tadaTUM. that, however, is my problem. the rhymes & sentence sonstructions are close to comic genius at times, & some are simply pleasing >The ship arrived and there on the sand >Was Nestor with a samba band >And the usual crew >To do what they do: >Killing bulls for Poseidon the Grand. SO (& this is the Conclusion part of this response) well done & thanks. KS On 20/06/07, joe green <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > The Limerick Odyssey is done: > > http://limerickodyssey.blogspot.com/ > > and the Limerick Iliad is complete > > http://limerickiliad.blogspot.com/ > > So much for the world as it is.