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Candice has posted at least one poem since she joined this list, and she explicitly asked for criticism. I wouldn't want to front-channel meddle with a pro's plumbing either, not without an invite anyway. Roger On 4/9/07, Stephen Vincent <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > Unless somebody is specifically asking for a response in the "appreciate any > suggestions" manner, I try not to make any public response to any problems I > hear or see in 'the plumbing.' I back channel suggestions occasionally. > That does not mean I don't make occasional reflections on the value I see in > a particular work. I generally shut up if I am left in neutral or worse! > Unless somebody makes what I find a politically, etc. outrageous view in a > poem. > Hal is a pro. I don't front channel meddle with his plumbing. And I > appreciate the generous multiple ways in which he shares his work and the > work of the others. > Candice, you clearly like to respond to much and often. It's curious that > you never put any of your work up here. I realize that is not a requirement. > But it would permit folks to know what you are about and how how your poems > may or may not inform your critical sense and/or if you are looking for > input or not. Otherwise you are always on one side of the plate. Which, > frankly, seems a bit awkward. And I think we are mostly poets here. > > Stephen V > http://stephenvincent.net/blog/ > > > > > > > Lighten up, Candice. I welcome any and all comments. > > And I welcome any excuse to send along the H.G. Wells > > quotation. > > > > Hal > > > > Visit Our Other Location > > > > Halvard Johnson > > ================ > > [log in to unmask] > > [log in to unmask] > > http://home.earthlink.net/~halvard > > http://entropyandme.blogspot.com > > http://imageswithoutwords.blogspot.com > > http://www.hamiltonstone.org > > > > > > > > > > On Apr 9, 2007, at 9:26 AM, MC Ward wrote: > > > >> When you post a poem here, the implicit assumption is > >> that you want comments on it. This kind of mannerless > >> response discourages feedback, so I, for one, won't > >> asume that you want any comments (or praise only) on > >> your posted poems. That makes even reading them a > >> waste of time, as is your time in posting them. > >> > >> Candice > >> > >> > >> > >> > >> --- Halvard Johnson <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > >> > >>> I second that notion. > >>> > >>> Hal > >>> > >>> "No passion in the world is equal to > >>> the passion to alter someone else's draft." > >>> --H. G. Wells > >>> > >>> Halvard Johnson > >>> ================ > >>> [log in to unmask] > >>> [log in to unmask] > >>> http://home.earthlink.net/~halvard > >>> http://entropyandme.blogspot.com > >>> http://imageswithoutwords.blogspot.com > >>> http://www.hamiltonstone.org > >>> > >>> On Apr 9, 2007, at 1:48 AM, Patrick Mc Manus wrote: > >>> > >>>> Roger These people who are cursed with wanting to > >>> rewrite other > >>>> peoples > >>>> snaps!!!!!! Ban them that's what I say :-) > >>>> Patrick de raynes park > >>>> > >>>> -----Original Message----- > >>>> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics > >>>> [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On > >>>> Behalf Of Roger Day > >>>> Sent: 08 April 2007 17:37 > >>>> To: [log in to unmask] > >>>> Subject: Re: snapshot -- revision > >>>> > >>>> how about this? > >>>> > >>>> Stepping into the morning > >>>> waxwing symphonies and crow concertos > >>>> air shivering, air trembling > >>>> sandman cacophony crowding out the daylight > >>>> ... why do we enter the future > >>>> with the past in our deep night pockets > >>>> > >>>> although you may not want to go that far ... > >>>> > >>>> On 4/6/07, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> > >>> wrote: > >>>>> thank you all for your critiques on this piece. > >>> here is a > >>>>> revision, which > >>>> i > >>>>> think is an improvement. i agree with andrew that > >>> it would be good > >>>>> to take > >>>>> the "I" from the first line, but can't see a way > >>> just yet: > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> I stepped from my house this morning, > >>>>> head crowded with voices from dreams, > >>>>> into shivering air, trembling air, symphonies > >>>>> of waxwings and robins, a percussion > >>>>> of crows ... Why do we enter the future > >>>>> with the past in our night pockets? Trees > >>>>> shook with squirrel passions; goldfish > >>>>> drifted from the pond's dark bottom > >>>>> into pale water. At dusk the mountains > >>>>> were scarved with mist. > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> On 4/4/07, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> > >>> wrote: > >>>>>> > >>>>>> I stepped from my house this morning, > >>>>>> head crowded with voices from dreams, > >>>>>> into shivering air, trembling air, symphonies > >>>>>> of waxwings and robins, a percussion > >>>>>> of crows ... Why do we enter the future > >>>>>> with the past in our night pockets? Trees > >>>>>> shook with squirrel passions; goldfish > >>>>>> drifted from the pond's dark bottom > >>>>>> up into pale water, reacquainting themselves > >>>>>> with the surface. The day passed slowly. > >>>>>> At dusk the mountains were scarved with mist. > >>>>>> > >>>>>> <http://www.sbpoet.com> > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> -- > >>>>> ~ SB =^..^= > >>>>> > >>>>> http://www.sbpoet.com > >>>>> > >>>> > >>>> > >>>> -- > >>>> My Stuff: http://www.badstep.net/ > >>>> "Patriotism is a virtue of the vicious." Oscar > >>> Wilde > >>> > >> > >> > >> > >> > >> ______________________________________________________________________ > >> ______________ > >> 8:00? 8:25? 8:40? Find a flick in no time > >> with the Yahoo! Search movie showtime shortcut. > >> http://tools.search.yahoo.com/shortcuts/#news > -- My Stuff: http://www.badstep.net/ "Patriotism is a virtue of the vicious." Oscar Wilde