This is so cleverly dense. Just about every word has at least two
possible meanings. "Unbroken flag" is my favourite part.
"Beneath" seems a weak word to end on. Taking it out spoils
the rhythm (although I'm not sure I like the rhythm anyway).
hope this is of some use
Janet
> This is intended to be part of a collection of small snaps about the Old
> Cathedral in Coventry (destroyed during WW2). I started it last year, had a
...
> ALTAR
>
> neatened rubble casting clots
> exploding shadow stains
> each unbroken flag beneath
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Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]>
Poems at Proximity:
http://www.proximity.webhop.net
Our humanity is diminished when we have no mission
bigger than ourselves.
Bono
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