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I'll think on't condens(e|ate). there's a series of a's running through the latter part of that poem which seem important to me, of which condensating forms a part of. I'm not sure if there are any more where that came from. Maybe it's the effect of putting up my poetry books for sale. I've got 14 poetry books left, and some of them will be going soon. Roger On 1/6/07, Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > Hmm. I imagine the inspiration forming tiny droplets, perhaps making > a delicate film, on her shoulder, and I would say they condense, > not condensate. Personally I think 'condensating' is clumsier, > because it makes a verb out of a noun that is already made out of a verb. > > But Roger, if 'condensating' feels right to you, stick with it! > > BTW are there more poems where that came from? > > Janet > > > Thanks for the comments everyone. It appears that the poem isn't quite > > fully-formed yet. I'll brood on the matter. > > > > Janet, from the chambers online: > > > > condense - condense verb (condensed, condensing) 1 to decrease the > > volume, size or density of (a substance). 2 said of a substance: to be > > reduced in volume, size or density. 3 to concentrate something. 4 tr & > > intr to undergo or cause to undergo condensation. 5 to express > > something more briefly; to summarize. > > ETYMOLOGY: 15c: from Latin condensare to compress, from condensus very dense. > > > > condensation - noun 1 chem the process whereby a gas or vapour turns > > into a liquid as a result of cooling. 2 meteorol the production of > > water droplets in the atmosphere. 3 optics the process of focusing a > > beam of light. > > > > feathers coming down from high altitude, condensation forms - the > > websters 1913 has to condensate as a verb. Also, a search on-line > > reveals condensating used in chemical processii, which is what I was > > aiming for. Admittedly condense seems to be a root for condensation, > > there does seem to be split here. Maybe the Reliable Rodent can help > > here? > > > > Roger > > > > On 1/6/07, Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > > > I like it too. Very strong imagery and different to the norm. > > > I'm inclined to agree with Andrew's suggestions. > > > > > > Shouldn't it be "condensed" rather than "condensated"? > > > > > > Janet > > > > > > > I like it, Roger. How about taking out 'Had I listened to the > > > > dark-side?' and 'I confess', both of which seem to me to take us out > > > > of the misty mood. > > > > > > > > I love > > > > > > > > > inspiration condensating > > > > > in sparkles on her shoulder > ------------------------------------------------------- > Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]> > Poems at Proximity: > http://www.proximity.webhop.net > > You cannot love alone > ------------------------------------------------------- > -- http://www.badstep.net/ "Hello Cleveland! Hello Cleveland!"