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Brrr, Patrick -- you'll have to cuddle up to VB's furry coat! The cat's pyjamas, indeed. joanna > Kasper to me the last line is okay -it is obvious direct and sits well ?? > P frozen P central heating died P > > -----Original Message----- > From: Poetryetc provides a venue for a dialogue relating to poetry and > poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of kasper salonen > Sent: 21 December 2006 00:04 > To: [log in to unmask] > Subject: Re: Snapshot 20 December 02006 > > it carries the reader along nicely, only to let him down at the end. "open > my heart"? surely there's something less obvious to end with. > > KS > > On 20/12/06, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote: >> >> one day >> to solstice >> >> all my days >> grow short >> >> they begin late >> they end early >> >> today the sky >> is wide pale blue >> >> the radio plays >> its seasonal songs >> >> the sparrows >> sing theirs >> >> all my years >> contract >> >> they shrink >> they pass >> >> quickly >> >> i am carried >> through them >> >> by time and love >> and loyalty >> >> by persistent >> determined friends >> >> who open my house >> to light >> >> who open >> my heart >> >> >> >> >> -- >> ~ SB =^..^= >> >> http://www.sbpoet.com >> >