I agree with Kasper - I found it disappointing, too. Janet > Kasper to me the last line is okay -it is obvious direct and sits well ?? > P frozen P central heating died P > >> it carries the reader along nicely, only to let him down at the end. "open >> my heart"? surely there's something less obvious to end with. >> >> KS > > On 20/12/06, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > > > > one day > > to solstice > > > > all my days > > grow short > > > > they begin late > > they end early > > > > today the sky > > is wide pale blue > > > > the radio plays > > its seasonal songs > > > > the sparrows > > sing theirs > > > > all my years > > contract > > > > they shrink > > they pass > > > > quickly > > > > i am carried > > through them > > > > by time and love > > and loyalty > > > > by persistent > > determined friends > > > > who open my house > > to light > > > > who open > > my heart > > > > > > > > > > -- > > ~ SB =^..^= > > > > http://www.sbpoet.com ------------------------------------------------------- Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]> Poems at Proximity: http://www.proximity.webhop.net You cannot love alone -------------------------------------------------------